Mr Mascellani's Musings

When I first read your poem, what I noted
was that it was a cluckket, written in iambwuck hentameter.
And it’s clear, my dear that you’re
influenced by Rooster Maria Rilke.

However, you use iambwuck hentameter
exclusively-to the detriment of the poem.
It becomes monotonous.
Why not add some flavour to your verses,
some kapowie to your poetry by using some ducktyls or chickees,
or maybe some henapests
You should work on things
Such as sound, imagery, and linebwucks.

Go to the “Clucks of Wisdom” forum
and check out some of the works byChookala, Hendrea, Little Chicken,
and Duck McReil, to name just a few.

Please take this advice, and stay outof the higher pens for a while.
Stick to the general ones.
You may even enjoy the Pink Palace of Poultry.
Good luck with your pecking and scratching.